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Post  Quartz Falcon on Mon Feb 03, 2014 1:49 pm

So I recently posted the last of my "Taming the Magic Knights" ficlets. It took me a while because I wasn't sure how to end it - maybe having the Head Maids talk shop about their Mistresses wasn't the best idea, but it was a way to show how Fuu was so far gone she didn't mind hearing about other heroines getting their wills subverted into loving devotion.

Anyway, I've been bouncing off ideas for the scenario in which Rose (one of the OCs in my fics) becomes a Mistress:

A group of heroines would hear in a town about a mysterious abandoned manor in the woods and how maidens would be seen heading there never to be seen again. Their curiosity piqued, they would head out to the manor, not knowing that that was just a story the waitresses were compelled to tell to any band of adventurers. The heroines would enter the manor, be confronted by Rose, who is dressed to impress and flanked by Brigitte, and in the middle of her welcoming speech, she would stop and notice the heroines were getting affected by a simple probing spell she had cast. At that moment she would dispel it, be all condescending to them to rile them up, and lure their leader away since they still believe she has other maidens kept captive. Brigitte would keep the others occupied until Rose was far away enough to cast Mass Maidia, a spell that turns all in an area into maids, summons a sea of maids and starts an induction process of accepting and enjoying the simple life of a Maid.

They could see each other amid the crowd, though not how large the crowd was. There were many girls, more than there could be in this region, all dressed as maids like they were. Suddenly they noticed the blond maid standing above them all, a smirk adorning her face.

"Everyone, stand at attention!" she bellowed, and they felt themselves stand firmer, hands in front. Before they could move... "Bow in greeting!" ...they all made a formal bow... "Picture your Mistress in front of you and bow again!" ...the image of the dark-haired beauty in the alluring dress and imperious smile entered their minds, and they all felt the compulsion to bow and say, "Welcome home, Mistress."

The exercises continued: knowledge of cleaning and cooking entered their minds, pushing other things to the background. Feelings of satisfaction in serving a beautiful Mistress developed... Eventually, the other maids disappeared, leaving only them and the blonde. ...what were they supposed to do? Didn't they have other clothes? It was getting hard to think...

Brigitte felt exhausted, but it looked like these girls weren't fighting the conversion. A good thing, too: she was taught to only use this spell if her not-yet-a-Mistress was just outside its range, to swoop in and finish the process before the targets could overwhelm her, but Rose was probably still converting the leader. This truly was a bunch of weaklings, but she supposed they had to start somewhere.


I'll post my idea for Rose converting the leader later on (it involves dancing), but I would appreciate any suggestions on which group of heroines to use.
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Post  Quartz Falcon on Sat Jun 28, 2014 12:49 am

Two ideas I had recently which I'm writing down for your perusal:

1) A story of a group of heroines (they can be superheroines, magical girls or what have you), the focus on the purer, more idealistic member. They band together, take on minor threats like monsters, lesser thugs and the like, and everything seems nice and proper like any show aimed at kids. But eventually things start changing once they start going after the bigger threats (organized groups, enemies that deal with corrupting victims, the works): the rich ojou of the group keeps having issues from the family business, the snarky tomboyish one teases foe and rescued victim alike, and the stoic one's eye wanders a bit at the state of who they face and rescue.

The idealistic one thinks maybe the bigger hardships are getting to her friends, and yet whenever an opponent tries to go for a mind whammy, she's always the one who feels it worst. Sometimes, her friends even shrug it off! And to top it off, she's begun to think not very pure thoughts about her dear friend, the ojou, and the other two sometimes behave in ways that are more like an adult couple. Scandalous!

Then one day, comes the reveal: the ojou? Her family's in charge of a large group similar to the ones they had been fighting: the whole time she had been leading the heroines into taking down the more extreme groups or rivals. She's being called back into the family business, and wants to know if the others want in.

The idealistic one gives an impassioned speech about how it's not where you're from but what you choose to be that matters, and that she knows there's still good in the ojou. Friendship can triumph in the end, even against a group that formidable!

Stoic and Snarky want in.

Idealistic is aghast; has the thrill of the enemy groups gotten to them? They should be stronger than such an allure! Snarky points that they're stronger than her; they can resist that stuff better than she can.

It all goes south from there, and Idealistic runs off, vowing to save her friends. She finds another team of heroines and prepares them to pick off from where the old group had left off. All but her get enslaved by a novice Mistress. The next team she tries to form got nearly turned into sex slaves for some ugly middle-aged man, but Idealistic kills him, and the team then kick her out for breaking the "no killing" rule.

Id: "My first team didn't have a no-killing rule!"
Team 3: "Aren't they the ones who went dark?"

And there's the twist: the other three heroines weren't heroines at all! At best they were anti-heroes; because they wouldn't submit to a higher authority, they refused to submit to anyone. Idealistic knows she was a heroine once, but she's stopped finding anything worth submitting to.

From here there can be two endings:

Tragic Missing of the Point: Idealistic keeps forming more heroines groups, trying to recapture the magic of her childhood. She can't: she keeps seeing brave young girls broken into submissive servants, or pushing her away because she's too 'extreme'. Meanwhile, Ojou sponsors groups of heroines as a side gig to her duties - the fact that they all succeed long enough to 'mature' into the Family proper stings Idealistic every time.

Slavery is Freedom! Control is Release!: Idealistic realizes there was only one person she ever wanted to submit to, and goes back to Ojou, tears in her eyes, apologizing for not understanding her. Ojou embraces her old friend, kisses her tears away, and lets her submit to her will.


...well, that was heavy. Let's try something lighter.

2) The Tale of the Designer Youma.

A young youma in Beryl's court had ideas for how to better gather energy, but she was too low in the ranks to catch the ear of any General. Instead, she watched and waited, taking notes of each plan and how she would have improved it. One day, when the Dark Kingdom falls, she manages to stay out of ground zero, but the Purification Wave turns her into a mere human with no memories of her life as a youma... and a long written list of plans to corrupt the senshi.

From here, the story can develop two ways:

a) The Ayakashi Sisters or Esmeraude, via knowledge of ZA FUTURE, identify the former youma and awaken her true nature. She then helps them modify their droids for maximum senshi makeover efficiency, and just to be on the safe side, sics one on each, for the most hilariously one-sided conversion ever.

b) The former youma enters Mugen Gakuen and ends up joining the Death Busters, her ideas becoming part of the Daimon Creation Process. Though Tomoe refuses to make more than one at a time, every Daimon has at least a low-level charm ability... that stacks up. Once Kaolinite or the Witches 5 decide to try converting the senshi, even Uranus and Neptune fall into their sway.


3. FEMDOMCON

A megacrossover. Every monster girl and mistress gather in one spot to show off their seduction skills. Some bring slaves, some converts... but someone decides the only way to confirm the winner of the convention is by doing it live, on a bunch of fresh heroines summoned in the middle of a packed hall! Can the girls escape FEMDOMCON with their wills - and chastity - intact?
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Post  Rainday on Sun Jun 29, 2014 3:59 pm

The first idea has a good amount of potential, but is a tad on the dark side, though a light touch might not be what you need or want with it.  This is just me spit balling mind you, but all girl worlds tend to lighten things up for me, and the lack of death...  I've never been a fan of it in any erotic fiction as it leaves a bad taste in my mouth, so to say.  I do like the idea of organized criminal ventures though, however not everything has to be big business, you could throw in some fun stuff like a Idol organization, a love hotel, a kinky mafia that sells a euphoric yet enslaving drug, maid cafe, restaurant(chenogasms), gym, etc.  No matter how much the main heroine wants to go back to rescue her new comrades she knows she will fall, for she is sent vids by a mysterious individual that show how much the brainwashed girls love their new mistress and their new lives, even if they had to give up their free will, they are still treated well, all thanking her for leading them to their new fate.  She'd be too afraid to go it alone, feeling that she would just be like them if the mistress was in the same room, or she happened to catch a whiff of some pheromones, or see the slightest hint of a swirling spiral.  Trying to convince herself that she's only getting new comrades only to protect herself.  The guilt would build, and she would try to turn to her old friend, but she see's how well their doing, how well the ojuo-sama's brought them up despite being what she viewed as corrupt, and just give in.  She would set up a webcam, transform in front of it, announcing where she lives, then proceed to strip in front of the camera, put a key on her door, then blindfold herself, take one of villainesses weakening agents, and blindfold herself, announcing first come, first served.  As she begins to fade she can already here a car pulling up, but she's quickly losing consciousness, and made it impossible to fight back so she wouldn't turn tail like all the other times.  She barely regains conscious as two women grope her body, their voice strong but blurred, all she can hear is "She's been waiting a long time for this.  When she wakes up, she finds herself in the ojou-sama's house, in a beautiful bed, with the ojou-sama's magical girls dressed as maids waiting to serve her. The idealist heroine can only respond with confusion, but when they start asking if they can take care of her(shower, hair, nails, massage, the works) she just meekly gives her okay.  Eventually she is left in a room, dressed like a beautiful princess, that's when the Ojou-sama and her former friends make their debut.  The Ojou-sama welcomes her back, and that she's safe now, that despite the idealistic heroine running away from them, they would welcome them back with open arms.  She then ask the others to leave and goes about telling the heroine how she always loved her, and how she wants her to be by her side forever.  She offers her riches, the chance to command her new magical girl squad to fight evil, but most importantly, if she becomes the princess to her queen(aka wife).  The heroine, who was so close to the edge is overwhelmed by this turn of events, confesses her own feelings that she thought were dark and perverted, how she would have we dreams of the Ojou-sama, and that if really wanted someone as unworthy as her to be the Ojou-sama's right hand.  The Ojou-sama embraces her, giving her a passionate kiss that melts the heroines body, and says she would have it no other way, that from now on, the was heroine was her's as much as the Ojou-sama was her's, and that she'll indulge her every perverted desire, every whim,  and sheath her from any harm.  The heroine returns the kiss crying tears of joy~

Meanwhile, snarky and stoic are walking down the hall, snarky keeps laughing about how easily the heroine was manipulated by the Ojou-sama, how she never suspected that the only reason she hadn't fallen to the other mistresses was because they were all in Ojou-sama's pocket, and actually sent out to capture and enslave any new friends she made.  How it was the Ojou-sama who sent those vids of the enslaved girls and repeatedly asking how a girl could be so gullible and stupid.  She even remarks that she doesn't understand why Ojou-sama offered her this position, as at any time they could of merely caught her and brainwashed to be another of Ojou-sama's pussy slaves like the maids.  The stoic heroine gives her a smirk, and pulls her in for a deep long kiss that causes snarky to melt more than the heroine did, and replies that just like them, that love kept them together, and how the chains of love can be more binding than any slave collar.  Snarky can't wait for stoic to show that passion in bed as Ojou-sama is about to do the same to idealistic in her bed.

Sorry, I rambled, got mushy and many other things, but yeah, everything has it's own direction.

Idea 2 sounds interesting, you could even through in a path where when the doom tree happens that could awaken her inner youma which has some sort of slight hypnotic power that she could use to get a Cardian AND a Sailor Scout on her side, before she captures Ail/Alan in a card and proceeds to seduce and hypnotize An/Ann with the help of the senshi and the cardian, that way she gains possession of the rest of the cards and can easily trick them with the beguiled senshi.  However, if it is a light hypnotic power, she would have to keep re-enchating them until she converted a cardian to that exact purpose.

FEMDOMCOM sounds quite interesting as well, though I'd advise you to not take on more than you can do, start off small and work your way up, just like a real con, every new time you get more attendees and victims =)


But yeah, just wanted to try to give you some feedback, I hope this doesn't come off as backseat driving or anything like that, so feel free to disregard all of this dood and do whatever you feel is rightest for the moment =)
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Post  Quartz Falcon on Sun Jun 29, 2014 9:09 pm

Feedback is cool, d00d!

I have to admit, the first idea got a bit darker near the end than I would have liked. The original idea would be to have the story be a slow burn building to the fallout, and having Stoic and Snarky's "fall" illustrated as they descend further into comedic sociopathy (or something like it).

Snarky: Come on! Is that the best you can do? Add some pretty blinking lights! Mood music! Smoke that intoxicates the mind instead of the lungs! What is this, the Seduction Amateur Hour?

Stoic: Young Miss, you are now free from the villain's foul grasp. Though if you yearn for submission, might you be interested in the teachings of the Goddess?

And Ojou-sama (who is Rose from the Taming ficlets; turns out she wanted to try out the heroine gig before joining the family business) would keep looking at the criminal ventures the team would bust and notice how shoddy the whole operation was. She could do better! Granted, most of the running she would leave to Brigitte (who would show up once in a while and Idealistic wouldn't know why she felt so jealous of Rose's childhood friend). But what to do about her friends? Converting them would be too gauche... maybe they can join her willingly?

The bit about Idealistic getting videos of the other teams' fates once she starts trying to get new comrades is something I definitely dig. They could be all designed like job recruitment videos, showing the important services they provide, the sense of camaraderie between brainwashed girls, even interviews with not just the mistresses, but the girls' friends and relatives, who all say how the girls looked much happier and got better grades since they joined their new jobs.

And every video would end with "If you wish to join, PLEASE SUBMIT your resume and a representative will contact you. WE ARE WAITING." None of the videos are hypnotic - Idealistic knows the videos are sent to taunt her.
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Post  singory on Wed Jul 02, 2014 5:08 pm

i like the idea of the heroine group Smile

check your Pm Smile

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Post  singory on Sat Dec 27, 2014 3:31 pm

well i wrote the story based on your idea http://fav.me/d8bfvjm

hope you enjoy it Smile

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